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Document:                                   draft-ietf-ccamp-flexible-grid-rsvp-te-ext-03.txt




Reviewer:                                     Christer Holmberg




Review Date:                               29 October 2015




IETF LC End Date:                       9 November 2015




IETF Telechat Date:                   N/A




Summary:                                     The document is well written, and almost ready for publication. However, I have a few editorial issue that I’d like
 the authors to address.




Major Issues: None




Minor Issues: None




Editorial Issues:




 




Q1:




 




‘RSVP-TE’ is expanded in the Abstract, but not in the main document. Please expand on first occurrence also in the Introduction (last paragraph).




 




Same comment applies to ‘LSP’.




 




 




Q2:




 




There is no reference for RSVP-TE.




 




 




Q3:




 




Would it be possible to replace the last paragraph of the Introduction with the Abstract text?




 




 




Q4:




 




Does ‘GMPLS’ need to be expanded on first occurrence?




 




 




Q5:




 




There is no reference to ‘GMPLS’ in sections 1 and 3. 




 




 




Q6:




 




The text in section 7 says:




 




“This section records the status of known implementations of the





              protocol defined by this specification at the time of posting of





              this Internet-Draft,…”




 




I am not sure whether we should use “Internet-Draft” terminology in a published RFC, and I am not sure what time “at the time of posting of this Internet-Draft” refers to.





 




Perhaps you could say something like:




 




“This section records the status of known implementations of the





              protocol defined by this specification at the time of writing the




specification,…”