I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-ippm-lmap-path-05.txt Reviewer: Elwyn Davies Review Date: 20 August 2014 IETF LC End Date: 22 August 2014 IESG Telechat date: (if known) - Summary: Almost ready for the IESG with a few minor nits. Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: s1, para 2: This topic has been previously developed in section 5.1 of [RFC3432], and as part of the updated framework for composition and aggregation, section 4 of [RFC5835] (which may also figure in the LMAP work ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ effort). ^^^^^^^ The bracketed phrase sounds as if it is a comment on work in progress: I think it needs a different version for the long term when this becomes an RFC - either (if this is to do with the development of this specification) it did or didn't figure - but it could be something that is relevant to implementation/usage of the specification - I can't tell (yet? or indeed after reading the full draft) - in which case it needs rephrasing appropriately. s3.1: A reference path is a serial combination of ... links, ... A piece of extreme pedantry probably: How would this apply to ECMP or Multi-Link Trunking connections where there is some parallelism in the link? s3.3/s3.4 et seq: Would it be better to use Dedicated Component and Shared Component (rather than ...ed component) to make it clear that the combination is the defined term? Capitalization of these and other terms (Managed/Un-managed) etc should be consistent throughout. s3.4/s4: I think Service Demarcation (Point) could be usefully treated as another piece of terminology definition and the current text in s4 moved to s3 - and placed before s3.4 so that s3.4 then refers to the previous definition. s4: Expand acronyms on first use please: "LTE UE" (in Service Demarcation) and "GRA GW" [The last two are currently expanded in the caption of Figure 1 in s5]. s5, items 2C and 2D: s/from point/from the point/ s5, Notes, first bullet: s/Some use the terminology "on-net" and "off-net"/The terminology "on-net" and "off-net" is sometimes used/ s5, Notes, fourth bullet: the remote end of the connecting link is an equivalent point for some methods of measurement (To Be Specified Elsewhere). Does the 'To Be Specified Elsewhere' mean that something has not yet been done that was intended to be done? Maybe the RFC 5835 comment??? s5, Notes, last bullet: s/The GW of first transit/The GW of the first transit/ s7, bullet #1: s/The CPE is/The CPE consists of a/